100WC – Week #46 -then suddenly it went dark

Aonani swayed the torch. Cari glared at her.

“Stop it!” she hissed. Aonani rolled her eyes.

“Nothings going to happen.” But it didn’t help that Cari was on edge. She wasn’t usually scared of the dark. She loved the dark actually. They were exploring a cave they had never seen before.  She also didn’t really like physical touching.Which was why the next thing that happened surprised me so much. Cari’s hand grabbed Aonani’s as the torch flickered.

Cari stumbled and Aonani grabbed her collar to stop her from falling.

Cari’s eyes went wide, “Aonani-” and then suddenly it went dark.

3 thoughts on “100WC – Week #46 -then suddenly it went dark

  1. Indigo,
    this is a wonderfully moody and intriguing piece.
    I love the way you have given your character characteristics that help you explore your theme and problem here. You include wonderful word choice and show-not-tell how your characters feel wonderfully. And you include very specific details like the grabbing of the collar and the flickering of the torch to really bring the piece to life in our minds,
    superb!
    Ant

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