100WC – Week #41 – when all of a sudden

One day Henry came home and said a man tried to take and when Henry ran away he was angry. Later on I told him that I was going to the supermarket. His sister was at home. When I came back I heard struggling. I was halfway up the stairs when all of a sudden I heard a gunshot. A moment later there was a crack. I ran into the room…I was too late. Jane was huddled over a body, a bloodied man behind her. A bat lay near Jane. I prayed I was wrong but I saw my dead son Henry. 

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week #41 – when all of a sudden

  1. Hi Indigo,
    Intresting 100 WC this week… The first sentence kind of threw me off straight away when I read it. Double check your spelling and grammar at all times, because sometimes even if the sentence may make sense to you, someone else may be confused. I like how things kind of elscalated very quickly. At first he was just going to the super markert… and the BAM, someone is dead. Nice job this week Indigo.
    -Brynn

  2. Hi Indigo,
    This was a really powerful piece and it was really well thought out, Well Done
    Ethan (My Name Is jeff )

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